Happy New Year (in advance)... My first time posting a review here, so typos be damned here goes:
Author: Lazuli and QuestofDreams
Summary: A bad jutsu has Naruto stuck in a parallel world that's almost like a dream.
Genres: Angst, Drama
Plot: One morning Naruto wakes up to a different Konoha. One where he is not hated by the populace, and his father still lives. Even his relationship with Sasuke is a completely different one. Does he really want to go back to his angst-filled life when this one is so much easier for him?
Grammar, Style, Spelling and Punctuation: I try not to be much of a spelling or grammar nazi, but since nothing in this multi-part story made me pull my hair out I will assume the spelling, punctuation and grammar are done reasonably well. Not perfect because dammit, nothing is perfect. However, I don't remember any obvious flaws.
Originality: The idea that Yondaime is Naruto's father isn't that unique, but the way it's presented in this story is very original. You feel Naruto's pain as he tries to reconcile this fact in this reality. The hurtful words he tells his father when he's trying to figure out why he is living in this universe were pretty gripping, you feel for Yondaime as much as you feel for Naruto.
Characterization: Given Yondaime is kind of a blank slate for most writers... we only get to see a bit of him in the Kakashi Gaiden if you read the manga, I thought his characterization is pretty good here. He's a fair man but still has a bit of mischievousness to him so you could see where Naruto gets his sense of mischief.
Naruto is Naruto. Loud but angry. And not willing to give up on his world despite the niceness of everything around him. He still feels empathy for his alter-self, who was basically a spoiled prince thrown into his hellish (i.e. normal) existence.
Sasuke here is a Sasuke who is not quite as bitter or power-hungry as the Sasuke in Naruto's world. This Sasuke never ran off to Orochimaru. Never had the battle that separated him from Naruto for years. So he's confused as to why Naruto is so full of pain and hurt.
Entertainment: Mighty entertaining. I've held off posting this because it's not complete yet, although it seems like it's one or maybe two chapters away from being completed.
Canon: Unfair since in fiction nothing is truly canon. But this is a SasuNaru story in both worlds, in one world where they are friends and rivals and in the other where they are lovers.
Flaws: None really. Although I think I would like if there was a little more Naruto interacting with Yondaime. They are pretty cute together and while Naruto is enjoying every moment he has with his father, he is also trying to not let himself enjoy it too much since it will be gone once he's back to his world. I know it's really a SasuNaru story and they are the focus, but it is still a nice element of an orphan who has never known family getting family and watching that play out. Actually a possible flaw is how silent Kyuubi is in all that is happening to Naruto, but it doesn't really bother me that much that he is pretty quiet throughout.
Strengths: Plenty. I rather like the fact that Sasuke was giving Naruto pointers on how to change his relationship with bastard Sasuke once he gets home. I also like how Naruto wants to get home to things that are familiar to him, yet deep down he also wishes he could stay where he is. However, for him the reality of who he is and how the hard knocks of life made him what he is wins out over a softer easier life.
Suggestions: None. I just want to see how it plays out to the end. :)
Overall rating: A very worthy read. Check it out.
Sample of the story: (I'm no good at picking sections but here's part of the first chapter copied and pasted):
Naruto's frown grew deeper as he stared at Sasuke. "What the hell is going on here?" he demanded. He and Sasuke had grown closer in the years since Sasuke came back from what Naruto termed his 'hissy fit', and he could generally trust him. Naruto was already searching throughout the room for his uniform, and continued to speak to Sasuke. "Where the hell am I?"
Sasuke watched Naruto pull open the drawers of his dresser, poking through its contents as if he hadn't a clue where anything was. He muttered something under his breath as he withdrew a pair of black pants from a drawer. A moment later, he threw open the closet doors and shouted, "Ah ha!" as he discovered a familiar black shirt and vest.
Sasuke, impatient with Naruto's peculiar behavior, marched up to the frazzled blond and gripped his chin in the same gesture as the Yondaime had only a moment before. "What's wrong with you?" he demanded.
Naruto jerked away, scowling. "What's wrong with you?" he shot back. "You're not upset at all that there is some moron pretending to be the Yondaime!" His hands gripped the fabric of his clothing, almost ripping it in his frustration. "I won't stand for anyone mocking him like that!"
Sasuke pulled the cloth free of Naruto's grip and clasped their hands, trying to calm the blond. "Naruto, I know you couldn't have hit your head so hard yesterday that you can't even recognize your own father."
Naruto's head snapped up to meet Sasuke's gaze, his eyes wide with disbelief. "My...what?"
His hands tightened on Sasuke's, as if searching for some type of stability. "My... you're... that's..." His words tumbled over one another, his brain trying to process the statement. "I don't know who my father is." His eyes searched Sasuke's for confirmation. "You know that, Sasuke. You know that I don't have anyone... and.." His chest hurt again. "Father?" he whispered, half in disbelief, half in longing.
Sasuke watched the emotions move unchecked over Naruto's face and he felt a sudden weight jerk inside him, as if his heart had suddenly plummeted into his gut. Naruto, he realized with a faint trace of horror, wasn't pretending.